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Friday, April 27, 2012

An Evil Night




The storm raged in the cold night
  Deathly shadow lurks with ugly design
Crept in silence with an evil in mind
   Glistening dagger shone in thundering light
Hunting prey for a night of macabre delight
   Sound of a gunshot n it was bull’s eye
A blood curdling cry and all quiet
   Killer in the shadow lay fallen immobile
No way could he exert the nefarious design
    She had settled the score in one swift strike
In the game of love a dishonest intent
    Never goes unpunished without paying a price

101 comments:

  1. How I wish this could be true! Alas :(

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    1. In rare moments, sometimes justice could be delivered, instantly,Zephyr!

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  2. Hmmm My god this post made me shiver, read it so many times!
    How did you come put with such one! ufff

    Keep writing, Rahul sir!

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    1. As long as I have readers like you seeds are sown to write:)A big thanks, Ramya!

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    1. Am happy you liked, Izdiher! BTW your new profile pic is very good:)

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  4. Wish this happened in all cases, and all women could punish those who assault them.

    http://rachnaparmar.com

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    1. Thanks Rachna! Instant justice is what we crave for:)

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  5. Really a strong powerful poem :)

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    1. A huge thanks , Purvi ! So good to see you back after a long break:)

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  6. Oh, this was scary! Great writing.

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  7. Hope more women are like her. Very strong, meaningful poem, Rahulji.

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    1. I wish all women are as strong to tackle the ones with evil designs, Sandhya:)Thanks!

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  8. very well etched ...an entire movie climax can be picturized on the basis of these lines you penned here .. visually strong poem

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    1. That was indeed a very kind remark, Sujatha! I am happy you liked it:)

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  9. Very strong use of words. Brilliant!

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  10. This was one live wire poem!! And the ending with a moral:
    In the game of love a dishonest intent
    Never goes unpunished without paying a price

    A powerful and a hard hitting poem, Rahulji.

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    1. Jenny, thanks a lot for liking the message the poem wanted to convey:)

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  11. Brilliant use of words and a befitting end! Just superb... the story, the moral, the words, the... everything!

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  12. That was pretty scary! Nice writing.

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    1. A big thanks Ria! Hope you did not have a nightmare:)

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  13. ''macabre delight''

    what an expression ,i bet the angel of death must have experienced it.

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    1. Arooj , it was fun choosing those words to describe the angel of death as you rightly mentioned:)

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  14. ohh.. that was so brilliantly written. Excellent blend of words and emotions! simply superb.

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    1. A big thanks, Raj and means so much coming from someone who is such a beautiful writer himself!

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    1. Thanks a lot Insignia! BTW a nice makeover in profile:)

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  16. Oh gosh, i could actually picture a scene in my head from a thriller movie, while reading this, the anxiety, tension, fear and dreadful anticipation - your words brought it all to life.

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    1. Oh Sam, was it like watching a thriller like Alfred Hitchcock's 'Psycho':) Many many thanks for those words!

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  17. Simply superb. I am trying my hands at short stories and this will perfectly go with the one I am writing. Very powerful Sir.

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    1. Saru, am very happy that you liked it and I am eagerly following the short stories penned by you! A truly versatile writer you are, and if I can provide some fodder to you, I consider myself fortunate:)

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    2. Sir, I am still stuck with it. Prose doesn't come naturally to me and I am struggling. Hope can finish it with some quality and post it soon. :)

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  18. Rahul, this poem is simply superb. You have a fantastic way with words, infact I should say your poetry is worthy of anthologies.

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    1. I bow to you with respect , Rachna for suddenly making me rise to those heights!A long road still ahead to traverse:)

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  19. A very powerful poem! Very well done!:-)
    Wish you a happy weekend!

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    1. A very huge thanks Tanya! Have a lovely weekend

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  20. Lot being said in just few lines. Nice choice of words.

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    1. Am trying to learn a few things from likes of you Leo:) A big thanks!

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    1. A big thanks Francesca for those adorable comments!

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  22. Few words are needed to express a story with its ending. All it took is a strike and its done! Good one.

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  23. Expressive ode,intense and poignant.

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    1. Thanks, Sharmila! Good to see you back after a while:)

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  24. Great poem and well written.

    Have a wonderful weekend.

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  25. To be frank i didn't get it in one read.I read twice and just could say one word..WOW!

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    1. Thanks a lot for that sweet comment, Sunakshi:)

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  26. Intense, strikingly dark if I may say so. Add the image and it becomes powerful.

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    1. Thanks, Rekha! Am happy that the image gelled with the words:)

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  27. well sir although i agree with the last two lines BUT in my life I am yet to see that happen ..

    :)

    Bikram's

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    1. Bikram , last year one Roopam killed a Bihar sitting MLA in broad daylight,Phoolandevi settled scores with many, the list is quite big:)

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    2. hmm true so true about Phoolan devi..

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  28. Wonderful writing dear Rahul, dark and menacing, but in the end justified!
    A hug
    xoxoxo ♡

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    1. Thanks Dianne! Dark things are also the reality of life:)

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  29. I felt like watching one whole powerful movie within such a short span of reading this intense poem..

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    1. Thanks a lot Padmaja, that I could create those images while you read:)

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  30. Hi Rahul
    First visit here. Intense poem,powerful words.
    Regards Ram

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    1. Welcome to my blog and a huge thanks for following too:) You made my day! Happy you liked the poem:)

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  31. Powerful verses...I wish I had written it :) great work Sir!

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  32. A thriller in verse...a power packed poem.

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  33. irrespective of the gender, those who hurt others, intentionally, or even inadvertently need to be punished. They javelin to pay the price.
    A very different theme of poem. Liked it :-)

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    1. Thanks a lot Ashwini and agree that regardless of who indulges in crime, must pay the price of deeds:)

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  34. Hi there, thanks for your always kind comments :)
    Have a great week!

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  35. Scary and intense words and nice end.
    Have a great week!

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  36. This is great poem on horror....beautifully penned...and lovely picture!..Thanks for sharing Rahulji :)

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    1. Thanks a lot, Valli for your nice comments!

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  37. I am not very much into poetry but this one held my attention! You are person of incredible talent- a writer and now a poet!

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    1. Meera, am grateful for those kind words of appreciation:)

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  38. Oh my!!! What a powerful piece- really talented!

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    1. Very nice to see you back Anjuli! A huge thanks:)

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  39. Sweet retribution, finally!

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  40. Yes Finally! Thanks Purba, good to see you back after a while:)

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  41. "Deathly shadow lurks with ugly design
    Crept in silence with an evil in mind"

    Super poem, Rahul. It has all the elements of a racy and intriguing thriller. Every time I read your poetry, I am surprised at the mastery and control you have over the words :)

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    1. A profound thanks , Rachna for all those choicest kind words. I will strive to write better and the company of likes of you makes the learning experience a greater fun!

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  42. This post should encourage a woman.
    A thriller in a poem! Great work.

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  43. Thanks a lot , Ruprekha for those kind words!

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  44. You have a way with words... brilliant and powerful!

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  45. Wow! This was scary and powerful at the same time. Very haunting.

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    1. A huge thanks Gayatri for those kind words:)

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  46. nowadays ur topics are really unique & am dumbfound with this poetry! :) really nice... keep smiling always :)

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  47. A big thanks Sowmya for your kind n sweet words:)

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  48. That is a brilliant post!!! Wow, what powerful verse!!! Woe me who has started visiting your blog carefully only now. What a shame that I missed so much...am you faithful reader from now on..

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  49. Am honored Bhavana for following my blog! A bi....gg thanks:)Happy you liked this one

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  50. Fantastic!!!
    Such powerful lines!

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  51. A huge thanks, Uma for liking this one, and making my first post reach the mark of 100 comments:)

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