The storm raged in the cold night
Deathly shadow lurks
with ugly design
Crept in silence with an evil in mind
Glistening dagger
shone in thundering light
Hunting prey for a night of macabre delight
Sound of a gunshot
n it was bull’s eye
A blood curdling cry and all quiet
Killer in the
shadow lay fallen immobile
No way could he exert the nefarious design
She had settled
the score in one swift strike
In the game of love a dishonest intent
Never goes unpunished without paying a price
How I wish this could be true! Alas :(
ReplyDeleteIn rare moments, sometimes justice could be delivered, instantly,Zephyr!
DeleteHmmm My god this post made me shiver, read it so many times!
ReplyDeleteHow did you come put with such one! ufff
Keep writing, Rahul sir!
As long as I have readers like you seeds are sown to write:)A big thanks, Ramya!
DeletePowerful verse!
ReplyDeleteComing from you, I treasure this , Vidya!
DeleteVery deep and powerful poem.
ReplyDeleteAm happy you liked, Izdiher! BTW your new profile pic is very good:)
DeleteWish this happened in all cases, and all women could punish those who assault them.
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Thanks Rachna! Instant justice is what we crave for:)
DeleteReally a strong powerful poem :)
ReplyDeleteA huge thanks , Purvi ! So good to see you back after a long break:)
DeleteOh, this was scary! Great writing.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lady Fi! Scary, it was meant to be:)
DeleteHope more women are like her. Very strong, meaningful poem, Rahulji.
ReplyDeleteI wish all women are as strong to tackle the ones with evil designs, Sandhya:)Thanks!
Deletevery well etched ...an entire movie climax can be picturized on the basis of these lines you penned here .. visually strong poem
ReplyDeleteThat was indeed a very kind remark, Sujatha! I am happy you liked it:)
DeleteVery strong use of words. Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton, Vinati for that huge praise:)
DeleteThis was one live wire poem!! And the ending with a moral:
ReplyDeleteIn the game of love a dishonest intent
Never goes unpunished without paying a price
A powerful and a hard hitting poem, Rahulji.
Jenny, thanks a lot for liking the message the poem wanted to convey:)
DeleteBrilliant use of words and a befitting end! Just superb... the story, the moral, the words, the... everything!
ReplyDeleteI am humbled with those kind words, Arti!
DeleteThat was pretty scary! Nice writing.
ReplyDeleteA big thanks Ria! Hope you did not have a nightmare:)
Delete''macabre delight''
ReplyDeletewhat an expression ,i bet the angel of death must have experienced it.
Arooj , it was fun choosing those words to describe the angel of death as you rightly mentioned:)
Deleteohh.. that was so brilliantly written. Excellent blend of words and emotions! simply superb.
ReplyDeleteA big thanks, Raj and means so much coming from someone who is such a beautiful writer himself!
DeleteQuick and crisp
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Insignia! BTW a nice makeover in profile:)
DeleteOh gosh, i could actually picture a scene in my head from a thriller movie, while reading this, the anxiety, tension, fear and dreadful anticipation - your words brought it all to life.
ReplyDeleteOh Sam, was it like watching a thriller like Alfred Hitchcock's 'Psycho':) Many many thanks for those words!
DeleteSimply superb. I am trying my hands at short stories and this will perfectly go with the one I am writing. Very powerful Sir.
ReplyDeleteSaru, am very happy that you liked it and I am eagerly following the short stories penned by you! A truly versatile writer you are, and if I can provide some fodder to you, I consider myself fortunate:)
DeleteSir, I am still stuck with it. Prose doesn't come naturally to me and I am struggling. Hope can finish it with some quality and post it soon. :)
DeleteWill wait :)
DeleteWill wait :)
DeleteWill wait :)
DeleteRahul, this poem is simply superb. You have a fantastic way with words, infact I should say your poetry is worthy of anthologies.
ReplyDeleteI bow to you with respect , Rachna for suddenly making me rise to those heights!A long road still ahead to traverse:)
DeleteA very powerful poem! Very well done!:-)
ReplyDeleteWish you a happy weekend!
A very huge thanks Tanya! Have a lovely weekend
DeleteLot being said in just few lines. Nice choice of words.
ReplyDeleteAm trying to learn a few things from likes of you Leo:) A big thanks!
DeleteWords have no misteries for you! Beautiful poem!!
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A big thanks Francesca for those adorable comments!
DeleteFew words are needed to express a story with its ending. All it took is a strike and its done! Good one.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Binu for your kind comment:)
DeleteExpressive ode,intense and poignant.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sharmila! Good to see you back after a while:)
DeleteGreat poem and well written.
ReplyDeleteHave a wonderful weekend.
Thanks a lot Eden! Have a nice weekend:0
DeleteIntense and powerful !
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot , Kavita for liking:)
DeleteTo be frank i didn't get it in one read.I read twice and just could say one word..WOW!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for that sweet comment, Sunakshi:)
DeleteIntense, strikingly dark if I may say so. Add the image and it becomes powerful.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Rekha! Am happy that the image gelled with the words:)
Deletewell sir although i agree with the last two lines BUT in my life I am yet to see that happen ..
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Bikram's
Bikram , last year one Roopam killed a Bihar sitting MLA in broad daylight,Phoolandevi settled scores with many, the list is quite big:)
Deletehmm true so true about Phoolan devi..
DeleteWonderful writing dear Rahul, dark and menacing, but in the end justified!
ReplyDeleteA hug
xoxoxo ♡
Thanks Dianne! Dark things are also the reality of life:)
DeleteI felt like watching one whole powerful movie within such a short span of reading this intense poem..
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Padmaja, that I could create those images while you read:)
DeleteHi Rahul
ReplyDeleteFirst visit here. Intense poem,powerful words.
Regards Ram
Welcome to my blog and a huge thanks for following too:) You made my day! Happy you liked the poem:)
DeletePowerful verses...I wish I had written it :) great work Sir!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Ashok for liking!
DeleteA thriller in verse...a power packed poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alka, for having liked:)
DeleteThanks a lot Ashwini and agree that regardless of who indulges in crime, must pay the price of deeds:)
ReplyDeleteHi there, thanks for your always kind comments :)
ReplyDeleteHave a great week!
Thanks once more!
DeleteScary and intense words and nice end.
ReplyDeleteHave a great week!
Thank you Sarah! Have a lovely week too:)
DeleteThis is great poem on horror....beautifully penned...and lovely picture!..Thanks for sharing Rahulji :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Valli for your nice comments!
DeleteI am not very much into poetry but this one held my attention! You are person of incredible talent- a writer and now a poet!
ReplyDeleteMeera, am grateful for those kind words of appreciation:)
DeleteOh my!!! What a powerful piece- really talented!
ReplyDeleteVery nice to see you back Anjuli! A huge thanks:)
DeleteSweet retribution, finally!
ReplyDeleteYes Finally! Thanks Purba, good to see you back after a while:)
ReplyDelete"Deathly shadow lurks with ugly design
ReplyDeleteCrept in silence with an evil in mind"
Super poem, Rahul. It has all the elements of a racy and intriguing thriller. Every time I read your poetry, I am surprised at the mastery and control you have over the words :)
A profound thanks , Rachna for all those choicest kind words. I will strive to write better and the company of likes of you makes the learning experience a greater fun!
DeleteThis post should encourage a woman.
ReplyDeleteA thriller in a poem! Great work.
Thanks a lot , Ruprekha for those kind words!
ReplyDeleteYou have a way with words... brilliant and powerful!
ReplyDeleteA big thanks Shilpa:)
DeleteWow! This was scary and powerful at the same time. Very haunting.
ReplyDeleteA huge thanks Gayatri for those kind words:)
Deletenowadays ur topics are really unique & am dumbfound with this poetry! :) really nice... keep smiling always :)
ReplyDeleteA big thanks Sowmya for your kind n sweet words:)
ReplyDeleteThat is a brilliant post!!! Wow, what powerful verse!!! Woe me who has started visiting your blog carefully only now. What a shame that I missed so much...am you faithful reader from now on..
ReplyDeleteAm honored Bhavana for following my blog! A bi....gg thanks:)Happy you liked this one
ReplyDeleteFantastic!!!
ReplyDeleteSuch powerful lines!
A huge thanks, Uma for liking this one, and making my first post reach the mark of 100 comments:)
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