The rain came down heavily and the clouds thundered. The
lightning tore through the sky lighting up the dark sky. The steps leading down
the Shiva temple down the narrow flight of more than two hundred steps had an
unusually big bundle wrapped in a blanket at the bottom of the steps. Manwar,
the postmaster was returning from the visit to the temple which had just closed
after attending the evening prayer and ‘aarti’. As he searched for the steps,
his feet struck the bundle that lay motionless. He bent down to see as the
lightning struck once more!
‘What, he exclaimed as he stepped back’! He was aghast to
see that it was, Kishan, the village rowdy, who lay motionless, apparently
dead! Manwar, could not believe what he was seeing. “Good riddance’ he muttered
inwardly as he shouted for help! Soon a small crowd gathered, including the priest
and a beat constable! The body was lifted, with great difficulty in the dim lit
of the lantern as there was no light around and taken to the dispensary where a
doctor was summoned. He declared Kishan dead perhaps due to head injury
sustained from a fall down the steps!
Munia was sixteen years old and the only daughter of the
sweet seller who lived in the small town of Lansdowne , ever since her birth. She had a
brother who was two years elder to her and had just finished his school. They
lived in a small house in small colony next to the sprawling Garwhal Rifles
Training Centre, an elite school
of Army ! Lansdowne, is a
small hamlet perched at an altitude, about thirty km from Kotdwar in Pauri
Garhwal region. The town had a small market, a primary school and few tourists
during summer visiting the small hill station. It had salubrious surroundings with
oak and Pine trees and unhindered views of majestic snow clad Himalayas
in the backdrop! The life moved at a slow pace in this sleepy hill station.
Kishan had come from the adjoining village in search of
livelihood. He was around twenty five years old, strong built and worked as a
porter. He would spend the meager earnings in consuming opium and country
liquor every evening and create a ruckus! One day while returning from his work
he saw Munia and stood transfixed! He was completely bowled over by her beauty,
her cute face with dimples and almond eyes . A few days later he saw her
returning from school and accosted her and made some lewd remarks! Munia was
dumb found by the sudden encounter, and ran as fast as she could! She was
panting when she reached home. Her brother who was at home asked her, as to
what had happened! On hearing the story between the sobs of his sister his fury
knew no bounds! Munia was too scared and managed to convince her brother to
avoid the duel as she knew that only her brother would return back hurt!
It was getting dark and the clouds thundered! Munia had just
started a descent down the long flight of steps leading to the Shiva temple
when she heard a ruffle of bushes behind her! Too scared she froze for a minute
and looked back! It was Kishan, who stood with a wide grin on his face!
‘Where will you go tonight’ he told her as he too started to
walk down the flight of steps!
Lightning struck once more and the rain cascaded down making
the steps slippery.
‘Oh God!’ please save me from this beast she silently prayed
and tried to hurry down. She lost her balance and the bottle dropped from her
hand and crashed on the steps. She hid behind the huge rock next to the steps
as Kishan charged towards her!
One more step, and there was a huge crash! Kishan had
slipped and next Munia heard cries of pain as he rolled on to the steps till
she heard a thud and a silence!
She slowly emerged from behind the rock and instead of walking towards the temple, looked towards it in darkness and
retraced her steps back home!
The next morning she woke up to the chimes of the temple bell
and the blowing of conch shells, as the morning sun rose! The sky was clearing
after the previous night’s rain. ‘Munia, “you know’, Kishen died last night,
her brother broke the news as he came running to her’ looking relieved. The
cooking oil which she had purchased the previous evening had saved her after
the bottle slipped from her hand, was what she last remembered!
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Aah a very sweet story, Rahulji, one that shows that nobody is forsaken in this world--not the weak, not the marginalized!!! Something higher than us will protect us, if that indeed is beneficial for us!
ReplyDeleteTrue Bhavana! Divine forces make no distinction when meting justice!
DeleteJustice in some way, if we can call that. Good story Sir. Oh, the title is Justice Divine. I should pay more attention to titles I guess...
ReplyDelete:) Saru thanks you liked it!
DeleteRahul...." A la justicia divina "
ReplyDeleteMuchas veces lo que uno menos espera, es salvado por un milagro.
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DeleteWas it Divine Intervention that saved Munia, a case of justice meted out by the invisible hand of God. Interesting post, Rahul.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Rachna for your comment! Divine justice at times is instant
DeleteWhat a great story!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ladyfi
DeleteGreat post! Shows that justice does happen - late, early or on time! Same with Karma.
ReplyDeleteCould'nt agree with you more Gayatri! Thanks a lot!
DeleteGreat...I am reading fiction on this blog for the first time. Kept me hooked till the end.
ReplyDeleteA maiden attemp, Alka! Happy you liked:)
DeleteA great story with a serendipitous outcome.;) I am so impressed by people that can write fiction, I can only reflect on and contemplate reality.;)
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DeleteThe Justice of God !!!!!!!!!!
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DeleteThe all pervasive force is watching every second of our life on this earth and nothing goes unnoticed! Prayers are always heard :-) Lovely narration Rahul!
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ReplyDeleteA bloody oily end,agree Purba:)
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DeleteI love happy endings. Somehow, I feel people think any piece with a sad end, becomes a piece of Literary art.But happy endings are considered predictable and average, which is so not the case. Why do we generalize?
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DeleteInteresting story. Relieved that the girl got saved. A happy ending is what we all look for.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I get irritated that girls like Munia need to depend on divine intervention. As a society, we should be ashamed that we are unable to protect our women, children and the weak.
Thanks a lot:)Agree with you that we are yet to learn to respect women folk:(
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ReplyDeletewhat matters is the justice done..... I'd love to witness more n more such divinity in real life... it'd be worth a watch Isn't it ?
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DeleteThis is a very interesting tale, well narrated and wonderfully described. It leaves one feeling slightly sad at the demise of Kishen, as that what death is supposed to feel like but then again there is a feeling of relief and justice that he has gone. Karma does work in strange ways!
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ReplyDeleteA huge thanks Raj for liking the story and details! Readers/Writers like you inspire me to write better:)
DeleteVery well narrated.. I felt as if I was reading a novel!!
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DeleteAshwini, totally agree that the cries of help of those in despair do get answered. Faith can make all the difference. Thanks a lot!
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