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Tuesday, January 15, 2013

Night without an End


The night was lonely dark n silent

  Only noise a flutter of wings of a bat

Rustle of leaves where the owl sat

  Creepy footfalls silently on the mat

A shrill sound of a banshee snaps

 She wakes wide in horror from catnap

Is this for real or a honey trap?

  Unable to decide she feels strapped

The throat is parched as hands quiver

     A harsh cry as eyes close in fear

Will I see again my near n dear?

     Is the haunting thought in clear?

Was this happening in dream or real?

   The beads of sweat trickle down

The feet were wobbly and heart pound
    
    The color crimson or blood on ground

PS  1. Image kind courtesy Google

      2. An attempt to write a creepy post !

90 comments:

  1. That is a bit creepy and very interesting. It's fun reading different genres. I liked it a lot!

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    1. Thanks a lot Saru that you liked this creepy post:)

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  2. I read a poem by Saru today morning on similar lines...It's not creepy to me...more or less depicting the way things are today..can one really sleep in peace? But, I liked the way you rhymed it.

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    1. Thank you Latha and such a pleasure to see you comparing this poetry with the kind of greats like Saru:)

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  3. Creepy!
    Loved the way you rhymed this poem and brought creepiness to this poem! Awesome! Very beautifully penned.

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    1. Thanks a lot, Valli and so happy that you liked it:)

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  4. Oh god. Rahul sir read the above lines thrice. Wonderfully written, but I only hope this is her dream, and then again I wish she doesn't have such dreams too!

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    1. A sincere thanks, Jenny for that beautiful comment! This was just a wild imagination and nothing beyond that:)

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  5. Felt like I have just witnessed a horror scene from a Hindi thriller Bees Saal Bad or Woh Kaun Thi. great stuff Rahul ji !

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    1. Oh thanks, Rama! Good you could remember the movies like Bees Saal Baad and Woh Kaun Thi through this post!

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  6. Creepy yet elegant.
    Nicely penned. :)

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    1. Welcome to my blog Ajay and am happy you liked it!

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  7. Penned well! I did not really find it 'creepy' but it was definitely different from the way you usually write :)

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    1. Thanks Divya! Your threshold of creepy is a few notches higher so will try something more scary next time:)

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  8. I loved this creepy post. Gave me the shivers. Rahul, please don't call this an attempt. It was a superb poem. Thanks for sharing it with us :)

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    1. Thank you Rachna for being ever supportive! Am happy you liked this different kind of post:)

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  9. That is creepy rahul sir.. but it did its job made me shiver ..



    Bikram's

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    1. Ha ha Bikram ! I know you are made of stronger stuff but thanks for your kind comment!

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  10. definately (NOT ! ) creepy..:P
    n very well written Sir..Its a sad thing that ppl still have to made aware about it...respect women n their privacy shall come as default...:(

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    1. Thanks a lot Jemina for that nice comment! Agree with you regarding the need for repect and privacy of the fairer sex:)

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    1. Thanks again Divya! Hope for a few moments you could get the eerie feel:)

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  12. Well written -- tense and a little scary.

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  13. Hi Rahul,,,i used to read your posts,,,really enjoyed each of them don't know much about its creepiness but it sounded awesome,,,great work,,,cheers

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    1. I am honored that you have been reading my posts and found them interesting!

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  14. Very nice rhyme there Rahul. Liked it!

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    1. Thanks a ton Jaishree and am happy you liked it!

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  15. It did creep me out...very well written sir.

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    1. Mission accomplished:) Thank You Ria!!

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    1. A big thanks Francesca for liking the poem.

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  17. Yes, the poem is scary and very well written too.Keep up the good work, Sir! :)

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    1. So happy you liked, Puji!! Will endeavor to keep writing so that you enjoy reading:)

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  18. I'll have trouble sleeping tonight. Very well put, Rahul.

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    1. You can squarely blame me for a sleepless night in that case Panchali:)Thanks indeed!

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  19. Successful attempt. The poem is creepy indeed! Bat's fluttering wings and owl's hoot is a scary combination.

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    1. Thanks a lot Kusum! Sure owl and bat are the elements of scare on a dark night!!

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  20. Hi Rahul, firstly, your rhyming is just brilliant! And I could really get the sense of fear and anxiety conveyed by this poem..it reminds of a scene from a Halloween scary movie!

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    1. Am honored with that kind comment, Sam! Scary things are Ok just once in a while like scenes of Halloween!

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    2. I am very glad and impressed to see you take on so many different genres in your poetry!

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    3. Thanks a lot Sam for ever being appreciative! It is fun to try new things while writing:)

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  21. Creepy indeed it is, and is a depiction of the situation we are in these days.

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    1. Thanks a lot Rama! I too wish that the situation of lawlessness ends to bring sanity back!

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  22. Even when it is giving me shivers, it is elegant, this is the beauty of your words I admire!

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    1. So kind of you, Padmaja for that generous praise! Thank you:)

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  23. Hello Rahul sir!!!!
    Poems can scare people tooo really this I got to know only after reading this brilliant post! I read it twice and thrice totally surprised by the way its written so much horror in words...

    Loved the last line the best The color crimson or blood on ground

    SUperb one Rahul sir!

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    1. So now you know, Ramya that what demanding something creepy can result into:) Thank you for those beautiful words!

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  24. Scary yeah :) I have read horror stories, first time reading a horror poem

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    1. Thanks a lot to appreciate an ateempt at something different!

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  25. Fabulous attempt, creepy scenes indeed painted beautifully through words! Loved it :)

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    1. Thanks Arti for your kind words! Nice to see you back again after a break:)

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  26. Scary! I can not sleep tonight...

    Hope you have a good time!
    Tania:-)

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    1. Thanks Tania and I am to be blamed for that sleepless night:) Have a lovely weekend!

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  27. Hi Rahul,

    I loved your poem. It was very creative with a dramatic undertone.

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    1. Welcome to my blog Hiten! Happy you liked!

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    1. Thanks a lot Ghazala for your comment:)

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  29. ..thanks for your thoughtful comment, have a great weekend!

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    1. Thank you Sam! Hope you had anice weekend too!

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    1. Thanks alot Annmarie for your nice comment!

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  31. Haunting indeed. like a nightmare that passed. Good work. I could imagine that poor little girl.

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    1. Thanks Juhi for your nice comment as always! Good to see you emerge from the dark:)

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  32. Loved this one. :) Looking for more.

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  33. Oh, I think you did very well, I sure can relate to waking up from a nightmare and feeling very much like you describe here.;)
    Have a lovely week ahead,
    xoxo

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    1. Thank you Zuzana for being able to relate to the post for some nightmare moments!Have a lovely week ahead:)

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  34. LOL you scared me, I am easily impressed !!!

    Fashion and Cookies

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    1. Welcome to my blog Vale! Happy you liked the creepy poem:)

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  35. Humans are creepier than ghosts.

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    1. You said it Purba! Could'nt agree with you more:)

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  36. Very creepy and interesting indeed sir..

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  37. Ooh! That sent a shiver down my spine!!

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  38. This is definitely creepy. I was reminded of this friend of mine who over exaggerates everything she sees and hears at night. She imagines everything and gets scared.Poor soul :-D

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    1. Thank you Ashwini! This was just imaginary post but seems you know someone who has had similar experiences!

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  39. Quite creepy it is... the pic and the words do as desired..

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    1. Ha ha... sent a chill down the spine, Manjulika:) Thanks a lot!

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  40. Created an excellent nightmare!

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