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Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Her Lovely Eyes


Her two eyes had sparkle n shine
  Radiance as if on a mission divine
Intoxicating like goblets of wine
  Promising forever to be mine
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16 comments:

  1. UnknownSeptember 27, 2011 at 8:50 AM

    lovely.

    but try putting 'to be' before 'forever.'

    check if it sounds better. :)

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  2. FirstTimeMotherSeptember 27, 2011 at 10:59 AM

    I again came across a beautiful 4 liner :)

    Sir, its really nice !!
    Take care.

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  3. smiling soulSeptember 27, 2011 at 7:18 PM

    4 lines talk a lot! :) nice one

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  4. Saru SinghalSeptember 27, 2011 at 8:31 PM

    It's so full of love, love the rhyming and the thought. Third line is my favorite. Beautiful :)

    Saru

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  5. Dr (Miss) Sharad SinghSeptember 27, 2011 at 8:51 PM

    Heart touching composition ....Very Nice...

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 11:17 PM

    Subhan Allah :)

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  7. rahulSeptember 28, 2011 at 8:30 AM

    @ Aasiyah- Thanks for liking!

    @Reicha-Thank You for having liked it

    @Sowmya- Thanks for those encouraging remarks

    @ Saru- Am enthused by your writings. So happy you liked it!

    @ Dr Miss Sharad Singh- Thanks for those kind words!

    @ Chintan- Treasure your remarks!

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  8. PurbaSeptember 28, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    The promise of the unknown is always exciting.

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  9. RahulSeptember 28, 2011 at 12:23 PM

    Unknown is always exciting- agree with you, Purba!

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  10. AnonymousSeptember 28, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    waah :) the new look :D way to go...i love it.

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  11. CяystalSeptember 28, 2011 at 7:07 PM

    Eyes ! The most intoxicating indeed ..
    A good string of words

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  12. RahulSeptember 28, 2011 at 7:49 PM

    Lovely..four very beautiful lines..

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  13. Rahul BhatiaSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:00 PM

    @Chintan-Thank you! You continue to inspire..
    @ Crystal- Sincere thanks for nice words!
    @Rahul- Thank you for liking this!

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  14. --September 29, 2011 at 10:17 AM

    Love this! Four lines of sheer beauty & rhyme :)

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  15. KunalSeptember 29, 2011 at 5:03 PM

    These are good lines...they say a lot...in a simple way.. :)

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  16. Rahul BhatiaSeptember 29, 2011 at 9:12 PM

    @ Lady Fiona-Thanks for your kind words!
    @Kunal- Thanks you for liking this!

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